[SOLVED] Statement of Purpose revision needed for Graduate School. From Economics to Data Analytics. Check for clear ideas, subject-verb agreements… i

I need help with a Writing question. All explanations and answers will be used to help me learn.

Basically, I am yet to submit this without a final revision. I have been working on it for a couple of weeks now. One main concern is my usage of the words “I” and “me” a lot throughout the paper. I am unsure if that takes away from the whole body of work for these types of assignments.Also, I tend to diverge away from the first person to the second, and present and past tenses.

I would highly consider someone that is used to writing these types of statements and are within the fields of Computer Science. Just to check if my ideas are as much in line as they can be with this field.

Having written this for so long, I began to become confused so thats why I need a fresh new set of eyes to take a look.

(Of course the School and Course are not the actual place I am submitting it to)