To Reduce the Violence in our Society

This assignment is in two parts. To prepare for the assignment requirements, read the following essay and answer the questions below. Teenagers seems to be out of control now days, and something needs to be done to control the violence in our society. To reduce the violence in our society, I feel that we needs to provide more jobs, provide more community centers, and a teen curfew should be enforced by the police. By providing more jobs will allow a teen to make their own money, so they won’t have to steal things or rob people. Having a job will provide teens with security and a advancement in society. A job will keep more teenagers off the street; therefore, reducing the crime in our society. A job will keep teens occupied with something to do, instead of bored and getting together with friends to commit a crime. Another, way for our community to reduce teenage violence would be to provide more community centers and set up more recreation activities such as bowling leagues, baseball and basketball teams, and alcohol free clubs for this teenagers. By providing more community will allow teens to get together and do activities other than committing a crime. Community centers in a neighborhood is a great place for teenagers to spend time with his or her friend and like doing recreation activities together. Community centers is a great place for teens to be instead of out in the hood doing crimes. I feel that, another way to reducing crimes in our society to set up a curfew for teenagers. Setting up a curfew will allow that teens are in home, they are not out in the street commuting crimes. Usually peoples homes are broken into in the middle of the night. By setting up a curfew for teens should reduce the number of break-ins. A curfew for teens will allow a parent to spend more time with their children; thus, allowing the family to spend quality time together, and also gives parents more time to educator their children, specially teens, on violence and the negative outcome of committing a crime. Part 1 Write a response to the questions below based on what you read. Answer the questions using complete sentences. What are the overall strengths of the essay? What are the overall weaknesses of the essay? Address each of the following four criteria based on the essay’s strengths and weaknesses: Is the essay concise? How? Is the essay credible? How? Is the essay clear? How? Is the essay correct? How? What specific recommendations would you make to improve this essay? Part 2 After you have written the response to the questions above, you must then revise and rewrite the essay based on what you have determined needs to be changed. The best way to revise and edit the essay is to print the essay, mark the hard copy of the essay, and then make the necessary changes.